THE BIG RUGBY GAME

 In class I have been learning to use show not tell to make my narrative interesting.To do this I have tried to have to get good punctuation and tried to keep it interesting. 

WALT use ‘show not tell when we write a narrative  

Student: Levi
How do we do this team?
By describing characters' looks, feelings, thoughts, and actions 
By using figurative language well
Dialogue - main characters Tom and Jerry and others. 
Planning - what is the ‘plot’ and what do we want to show?
                                             
THE BIG RUGBY GAME

Orientation sports field and characters Two brothers) Problem do not get along - ones adventurous -  they act like good brothers

. There were once two brothers who were not at all alike. One was addicted to video games and a total game freak and the other was an in it to win it, person, he is a really sporty guy. Tom was big, fit, healthy, fast and brave he was the team captain. Jerry was weak, unfit and scared of being hurt and bullied by his team and older brother, but he was the smartest in his team on how to play rugby but was very unfit. 

 

2. One afternoon their Mother dropped them off at there rugby game. The team was getting ready to vers the sharks but jerry was scared of them and tom said “get up you lazy boy and get ready to play”. They all went out and started to play. the big brother started to get scared because the other team was bigger and filter than the big brother. 

3. The big brother got bold over a few times but still fin they played and played and played until the big brother got hit and fainted so the little brother got up fear stabbed his hurt well he got up but his brother told him I believe in you so he started to play he played until the game ended.

4. The little brother went to check on his big brother and he was fine. The little brother ran up to the big brother and gave him a big hug the big brother said “I never thought you had it in you”.